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My Poetry Thread

Discussion in 'The Pavilion' started by Mohsin, Jul 30, 2012.

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    Mohsin

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    Hey guys, ive been meaning to start writing poetry for a while but havent had the time/havent been bothered tbh. But i came back from Taraveeh last night, and suddenly was in the mood to...well start writing.
    So yeah let me know what you think (be blunt and honest), i know its probably nothing special and quite short but it is my first ever poem lol.


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    Mohsin, Jul 30, 2012
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    Passionate Pakistani

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    that was brilliant @Mohsin payaan.
    Passionate Pakistani, Aug 1, 2012
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    Superb
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    pak_fan_4_life

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    Excellent, why arent u my english tuition teacher???
    pak_fan_4_life, Aug 2, 2012
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    Mohsin

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    Thanks guys appreciate it....lol i can be if you offer the right price @pak_fan_4_life :)
    Mohsin, Aug 2, 2012
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    pak_fan_4_life

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    Id have given anything but my exam has gone and all i can do is wait till my results in two weeks!
    pak_fan_4_life, Aug 2, 2012
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    Mohsin

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    My second poem, wrote this a little while back after i saw an interview of this guy who had acid thrown on his face because of a marriage rejection on one of the Ramadan shows...he was badly disfigured and practically had no nose.

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    Mohsin, Aug 9, 2012
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    NO 1 AFRIDI FAN

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    Excellent stuff @Mohsin! You should leave law and start writing more often. :p
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    Aunty Virus

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    @Mohsin

    Nicely written. But i think you should be giving us 'your' views on the subject rather then how/what the subject is feeling. You dont know what the subject views are exactly.
    Aunty Virus, Aug 9, 2012
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    Mohsin

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    Thanks guys, lol leave law and start writing? I wish!
    @Disco Lemonade yeah good point man, I'll bear that in mind
    Mohsin, Aug 10, 2012
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    pak_fan_4_life

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    are you a proffesional poet, by that i mean have u published anything??
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    Mohsin

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    Nah man, only started like 2 weeks ago lol, and I wouldn't know the first thing about getting it published (not that anyone would want to publish it IMO tbh)
    Mohsin, Aug 10, 2012
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    pak_fan_4_life

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    But its really good, u should try to get it published, im not kidding!
    pak_fan_4_life, Aug 12, 2012
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    Mohsin

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    ^lol thank you, but like i said i wouldnt know the first thing about getting this published. Plus i dont think people'll be interested in a couple of lines of poetry written by the random guy lol
    Mohsin, Aug 14, 2012
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    Mohsin

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    Written for Pakistan, on her Independence Day:



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    Mohsin, Aug 14, 2012
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    pak_fan_4_life

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    Brilliant work again, i wont stop admiring it!
    pak_fan_4_life, Aug 14, 2012
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    Mohsin

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    Enjoy :)








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    Mohsin, Aug 21, 2012
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